Here is a first chapter of a collaborative effort between my seven year old daughter and myself. This is a first draft and keep in mind, I’m trying to get my daughter interested in the process of writing so yes, it moves a little quickly and I do allow her to compose 50% of the stuff in here so if you choose to bash this one, just keep in mind, she’s seven and I’m very protective. If you feel like bashing, bash some of the swill I’ve put up here in the last couple years.
Alanis Jean Harris
Dale James Harris
One day at a beach there was a girl named, Marissa. She was walking along the shoreline
alone as her brother played in the water, and her parents lay on their beach chairs. She was a little scared walking off by herself, but since she knew she wouldn’t go in the water alone, she thought would be okay…she was wrong! The trouble wouldn’t come from the water at, but the trouble would come from the woods just up the shore. The woods where she heard the noise.
Walking down the beach, Marrisa kept her eyes on the sand as she looked for pretty rocks in the shallow surf. She almost stepped on a pretty shade of blue rock. She thought it was a blue rock, but she managed to keep from putting her weight down on it. Hovering on one foot she slowly moved her foot to one side and there she saw a robin’s egg. She saw a path from a tree straight to the robin’s egg. She gently picked the egg up and she saw the nest and put the egg carefully back where it belonged.
She was just lowering herself down from peering into the nest when she heard it. The noise!!! The bushes rattled and out of them popped something she wasn’t expecting to see. It was a little bunny. It looked like a lot of other bunnies, but this one was just as blue as the robin’s egg she had replaced in the nest. The bunny, sat up on its hind legs and looked Marissa right in the eye. It looked like it had something to say.
Marrisa didn’t see it at first, but hanging around the neck of the bunny was a small gold charm. “Hi, blue bunny. Don’t be scared. Watcha got there little guy?” Then something very unexpected happened.
The bunny, wiggled it’s nose, it’s whiskers twitched and the bunny said,”What I’ve got here, little girl, is a charm. A charmed charm. It lets me talk to humans. I came to talk to you, Marissa.”
“How did you know my name?”
“I was sent by the great hart to fetch you. Follow me.” With those words, the bunny hopped away a few meters, stopped looked back over it’s shoulder to see if Marissa would follow and hopped and stopped again waiting for Marissa.
Marissa didn’t know what to think. She was scared, but just then she took a step forward. Then another and another she took as a many as she had to till she caught up with the bunny. The bunny went slow enough so Marissa could keep up. It seemed like they went a long way into the woods. Just when Marissa was scared she would never find her way back to the beach, she and the bunny came into a clearing. Standing in the clearing were more animals than Marissa had ever seen outside of the zoo.
There were foxes, bears, more bunnies, countless birds including owls, robins, eagles, pheasants, sparrows, hummingbirds and all sorts of other birds that Marissa had never seen before. In the center of the clearing was a small glassy pond. In the pond floated a wise looking swan, some assorted ducks, and a few ducklings. Around the pond stood yet more animals. Quietly standing in place were badgers, coyotes, skunks, beavers, rodents of all sorts, like field mice, shrews, chipmunks, and moles peeking out of their holes. There were many deer there, too. But the most special deer had yet to make his appearance.
The animals began to divide into two groups, making an opening and then of all things….they began to kneel! The clearing was even more silent than before. Marissa was wondering what in the world was going on. Just as she was about to open her mouth to ask a question, the blue bunny announced, “All hail the great hart!”
From deep in the woods, a majestic looking buck strode forth. He was the biggest buck Marissa had ever seen. He was at least as tall as her dad. He was almost the size of a small horse! On his head, were antlers like any other buck, but not like any other buck, were the colors of those antlers. On the right side of his head, the antlers were a brilliant gold. The antlers on the left side were as red as blood. Striding purposefully over to the blue bunny, the massive deer bent his great head and lifted the charm from the blue bunny’s neck with one of the tines of his special horns so he could talk to Marissa.
“Marissa, we have been waiting for you,” his deep voice rolled. He turned his head to the blue bunny. “Good work, (need a name). You have done well.
There is grave trouble afoot, Marissa. We need your help. (end chapter 0ne)